Friday, July 31, 2009

A Chilling Wind

This version of "A Chilling Wind" is now gone.  It has been replaced by this current version.


  1. This was an interesting read but was the whole point that there is a battle between good and evil or the living and dean or dead or undead? The piece held my attention and I'll follow you blog.

  2. I read a lot of blogs, and because I'm very picky (IE I've read thousands of stories throughout the years)I can tell within the first few paragraphs whether someone has got the goods or not. You definitely do. You're a very solid writer, and I'm looking forward to more stories from you.

    I also like the way you don't talk down to your reader. A trap that a lot of writers fall into.

    Last point, on the story itself; it's rather reminiscent of Truman Capote's In Cold Blood, one of the best books I've ever read about murder. I'm currently re-reading it to try and capture that great chilling narrative that he wrote with.

    I'm also working on a novel about a serial killer, and I enjoy the realistic style of "A Chilling Wind" as it is very close in style and content to Capote's book(even though In Cold Blood was a non-fiction story...)

    Well done.

  3. Swaney, the point was that "good" will go to all lengths to keep people "in the church" - frighten, terrorize, murder. See: Crusades, Inquisition, jihads, name it. If you think this pretty much reflects my opinion of religion and the conservative mindset, you'd be right.

    Den, I'm officially preening. :-) Thank you.(I'd say more but I can't see out of my inflated head.)

    I appreciate both of you taking the time to stop by and comment. Oh, and welcome!

  4. I liked the wordsmithing, good VSS. reminds me a bit of Waiting for Godot". Got the "good" and "evil". The symbolism i.e. blond man/dark man to me perhaps a bit too obvious. But I'm so much into symbolism as was James Joyce(one of my all time favorites). Good story. Thanks

  5. I loved the progression of this story. The story itself was logical and kept on target without getting sidetracked along the way. The language used didn't talk down to the reader, a point that was made by TheWritersDen, reaching the audience with both strength and subtlety. Thanks again for posting this absorbing short story.

  6. Ouch. Lacorbeau, I offer my most sincere apologies. I didn't receive notice of your message, so I didn't comment. I'm quite sorry.

    The symbolism was a bit obvious - and that was the plan. I wanted the story to progress, and I didn't want to explain it all out, Star Trek-style, in the end, but I wanted NO ONE to fail to get what was going on.

    Thanks for the feedback. Again, I'm sorry I missed it the first time.

    Keikomushi, thank you very much for the kind words. I'm glad you liked it. But...I must ask...have you seen the edit?